Student's Writing

We have a new transfer student called Minsoo in our class
His dad works for the SamSung ship building company and he transferred here
He was proud of his dad for making the biggest in the world
I'm proud of my dad,too
My dad is a police officer who work for safety of the town
When I get home today,I 'm going to tell my dad that I love him

아래의 글은 전에 작성된 선생님의 첨삭물입니다.  새로운 첨삭물을 보낼 때는 아래의 글을 삭제하십시오.
Student's Writing
We have a new transfer student called Minsoo in our class
His dad works for the Samsung ship building company and he was transferred here
Minsoo was very proud of his dad for making the biggest ship in the world
I'm proud of my dad, too
My dad is a police officer who works for the safety of the town
When I get home today, I'm going to tell my dad that I love him