Student's Writing
Today is the Children's day.
I went to the Everland theme park with my mom and friends.
There were a lot of people there beause it was a holiday.
In order to get on one of the rides, I had to wait in line for a very long time.
My legs were aching but payed off and I got a chance to get on many of the rides.
My legs were aching but the efforts payed off and I got a chance to get on many of the rides.

Riding roller coaster was fun. I thought I was going to fall on the ground during the ride.
Riding a roller coaster was fun.  I thought I was going to fall on the ground during the ride.

I am grateful toward my mom for bringing me and my friends get to the theme park.
I am grateful toward my mom for bringing me and my friends to the theme park.