Student's Writing

Title: pianist

I am practicing the piano to become a pianist.
Lately, I heard the news that the small girl won on first place at piano contest.
The news said that her practices hard every day.
I will practice hard to win a first place at piano contest.

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Student's Writing
Title: pianist

I am practicing the piano to become a pianist.
Lately, I heard the news that the small girl won on first place at piano contest.
Lately, I heard the news that a small girl won the first place at the piano contest.

The news said that her practices hard every day.
I will practice hard to win a first place at piano contest.
I will practice hard like her to win the first place at the piano contest.